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Criticism
July 14, 2013
Your writing is choppy,
It lacks a good flow.
Your rhyming is useless;
It's pointless you know.
Your stanzas are long,
And grammatically incorrect.
Your plot is so boring,
I can't stay erect.
You can't count your syllables,
Haikus are a chore.
Your characters are adolescent.
Don't give me anymore!
Though... your story was okay.
I mean, all in all.
Your stanzas were descriptive,
And left me in awe.
Your writing kind of represents,
the vast and stormy seas.
And poems don't necessarily,
have to rhyme with ease.
Adolescent characters,
They're everywhere I look.
And maybe, just maybe,
Yours would make a good book.
© Michael H., Mildford, CT
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Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2013 at 4:33 pm
Thank you! That really means a lot to me. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it!
Carly_Elizabeth PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2013 at 3:50 pm
This is so creative. I really liked. It flowed great. And rhyming is hard (that why my poems never do haha) but you made it look so easy. And I love how you took poetry in a different direction and you wrote about something no one would think of doing. And I liked how you started out with some mean things a person would say then turned it the other way. I really really enjoyed this. Keep it up! :)
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2013 at 10:21 pm
Thank you for reading it! I'm glad you liked it.
Superhero_Fan SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2013 at 10:20 pm
Thank you for reading it! I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad it flowed well. I was kind of trying to make it half negative, and then counter-act it with the positive things. Thank you for being specific; I really appreciate it!
LexusMarie PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 27 2013 at 9:26 pm
Hey there! I really enjoy the different perspective of a poem about poetry. All the poems I have read about poetry are all positive things and it's very interesting to read this poem on the negative things. It's nice to read a poem by you since I have only read fiction stories of yours. This poem unlike the one you speak of did flow very well and I thought the rhymes were also nicely done. This is completely original. I think this is written very well!
vegetariangirl said...
on Jul. 27 2013 at 5:43 pm
I love your poem, it's so creative and original!!!
